Robin Hawke


Birthday Party
September 15, 2011, 1:30 PM
Filed under: All Writing Challenges

His stick hit each baluster of the fence: click, click, click, a run of metallic sounds. Melinda heard him, ran over to talk.

“Today’s my birthday.”

“How old are you?”

“Older than you.”

“Is that for your party?” Toby asked, pointing to a rose topiary. His finger was grimy, but she took no notice.

“You’re invited. There are balloons.”

“Cake?”

“And ice cream.”

“What kind?”

“We’ll play games together.”

“Which games? Tug of War?”

“I’ll dance to music. You’ll win prizes.”

“I’m wearing…I can’t change clothes.”  The apology was in his eyes.

“It’s okay, I can’t unlock the gate.”

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Loved the last line. All the build up and excitement of a party, and then the crushing realisation that they are stuck on opposite sides of the fence.

Comment by Sally-Jayne

It is crushing. I wanted more for them…Robin

Comment by Robin Hawke

Oh no – how devastating! I loved the stuccato conversation & the understanding of each player. Brilliant! Great to see you on the 100WCGU!

Comment by Julia Skinner

Great take on the prompt. Loved the way you used the dialogue.

Comment by Anna




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