Robin Hawke

September 24, 2011, 2:16 PM
Filed under: All Writing Challenges | Tags: ,

Three men took their places: Inside, Saunders crouched next to paint cans and drop cloths, his weapon ready. Outside, his associates remained on alert,  a crackerjack driver and—Saunders always had a backup plan—a sniper on the roof.

Saunders shifted his weight. With little but thoughts of his job to occupy him, he stacked cans to make more room. He waited, stretching fingers when necessary.

The body crumpled. Death was quick if merciless, quiet if untimely.

At a predetermined time, the dream team left their posts. Saunders stayed in the closet for the next nine hours, a bloody failure.

Entries -- "occupy" prompt.


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Whoa!!! Nods head – snaps to the author. 🙂

Comment by barbara

I’m happy that I was able to edit out over 200 words…this one was tough. Thanks! Robin

Comment by Robin Hawke

Excellent visuals. Nicely done.

Comment by Tara R.

Very nice!

Comment by seekingelevation

Oh, so good I’m jealous!

Comment by Stella

Loving your contributions. There’s so much more to this story, I get that, but it’s a potent piece.

Comment by Velvet Verbosity (@velvetverbosity)

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