Robin Hawke


Steve
October 28, 2011, 3:16 PM
Filed under: All Writing Challenges | Tags: , ,

Steve was the bold one; he hid an old stick of dynamite near the entrance to our clubhouse, our secret Keep Out Or Else. Later, I knew right where to hide the diamonds. Knew it like I knew the dusty path from Steve’s house to mine.

There’s a checkmark on my file, one that says I’ve paid twenty years to society. I wait, patient, drive home a year later. Jex Blake Road is gone—replaced with miles of  suburban cul-de-sacs and empty look-alike homes. And, they destroyed the abandoned mine—made it a lake. Hope Steve leveled someone.

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twenty years sure changes the landscape. Great story, Robin.

Comment by Russell

I would love to know the entirety of this story. You have created some intriguing elements in such a short space. Great job!!

Here’s mine: http://sweettea.kdmccrite.com/a-highway-runs-through-it-flash-fiction-102811/

Comment by kdmccrite

Oh I hadn’t thought about how much it would change in so many years. Bet he didn’t either. Good one!

Comment by Madison Woods

That’s the part that inspired the rest…I actually went looking for Jex Blake Rd on Google Earth. You can guess what I saw, Robin

Comment by Robin Hawke

Another great short story! This old dynamite proved to be very inspiring. Well written and gritty too.

Comment by Lindaura Glamoura

Hi Robin,

‘Hope Steve leveled someone’. Love that line and your whole story. Kind of a comment on our slash and suburbanize society, too. Very well done.

Aloha,

Doug

Comment by dmmacilroy

Thanks everyone! Three time periods in 100 words, hope I don’t try that again, Robin

Comment by Robin Hawke

This one has me thinking…Great use of the prompt!

Comment by susielindau

Ooh! I wonder if the diamonds will still be there!

Comment by The Lime




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