Robin Hawke


Note
February 24, 2012, 2:32 PM
Filed under: All Writing Challenges | Tags: , ,

The writing on the note was plain, a jumble of capitals and lower case. The paper was perforated, a jumble of lines and holes. The ink was smeared. And I read the words of a liar. I tried correlating them to experiences and memories without success. Staring at the truncated crossings of letters t and f, the open loops of letters g and p, I noticed the haste in the letters I, I, I, the fear I would interrupt him in the gaunt y, o, u. In my search for shreds of content, meaning disintegrated into picked bones on stone.

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I love how you took the photo prompt and used it as a metaphor for the shreds of paper/words. Love, love, love “picked bones on stone” phrase. Thanks for sharing!

http://kbnelson.wordpress.com/2012/02/24/friday-flash-pilgrimage/

Comment by kbnelson

The obvious always seems like cheating in that we shouldn’t get as much meaning from our first easy impulses but I’m placated by your response. And simple rhymes are so satisfying.

Comment by Robin Hawke

Wow, very nice, lovely writing and a wonderful use of metaphor. Loved it.

Comment by Judee

Thank you!

Comment by Robin Hawke

I started reading this and thought you hadn’t bothered with the photo prompt this week. How wrong I was – what a wonderfully different take on a prompt so many of us have taken literally.

http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/02/24/friday-fiction-14/

Comment by elmowrites

There is a character named Bones (Charles de Lint’s 1997 book Trader)–I flashed on the small pile of bones he used to tell the future, which reminded me of tea leaves and then, somehow, I jumped to reading Dear John letters over and over again.

Comment by Robin Hawke

This was wonderful, especially how you linked it to the photo prompt. Hats off to your creativity.

Comment by Janet

Glad you enjoyed! Thanks, Robin

Comment by Robin Hawke

This is very clever and a unique take on the prompt. Employing graphology to pick over what I interpret to be either a love letter or break-up note? Superb. I don’t fancy the guy’s chances. I love your last line 🙂 (Did you study graphology? This feels very authentic.) Really well done.

Comment by andyfloodwritersblog

No. Yes. I’ve not studied handwriting, but I have examined letter forms choosing fonts.

Comment by Robin Hawke

This “And I read the words of a liar” is perfect and the whole story was so different from anything else I have read so far this morning. You win.

Comment by Craig Towsley

That is the turning point isn’t it? Probably why I resisted deleting the And. Thanks! (I’m not accepting the win, too many good ones written for this prompt.)

Comment by Robin Hawke

Wonderful outside-the-box creativity. I, too thought that you were going off the prompt. Exceptionally creative. I loved it!

Mine: http://vsta.pr/zxAJ1y

Comment by V. L. Gregory-Pohlenz

I didn’t make a conscious effort to be creative. As usual, I prowled ideas until I found the story I felt like telling. I’m glad it struck you as outside-the-box, but I was right in my comfort zone. Thank you for your kindness!

Comment by Robin Hawke

This was WONDERFUL! It took me two readings to really understand what was happening, which I love! Thank you for sharing this. 🙂

here’s mine:

http://sarahthestoryteller.wordpress.com

Comment by Sarah Paige Berling

Shucks! Thank you.

Comment by Robin Hawke

Nicely done, Robin. I loved how the photo inspired the precise deciphering of the words on a page.

Here’s mine:
http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/02/cave-100words-for-fridayfictioneers-and.html

Siobhan

Comment by Siobhan Muir

Thank you! Enjoyed yours too, Robin

Comment by Robin Hawke

Hi Robin,
Really interesting way to approach this, from the point of view of handwriting analysis. I guess the medium really is the message. Fascinating!
Here’s mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

Comment by bridgesareforburning

No wonder the monks used to illuminate their manuscripts!

Comment by Robin Hawke

I love the POV of this piece and the jumping point from the prompt. Both very lovely.

The link for mine is: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/02/24/let-flow-what-is-left/

Comment by Quill Shiv

Thank you. Your visits are always appreciated.

Comment by Robin Hawke

I really enjoyed your description. I’d imagine that describing handwriting is no easy task, but I feel like you’ve pulled it off with ease.
http://wp.me/pVRF7-r2

Comment by Steven E.A.

I realize, after your comment, that the handwriting was one of the characters in this story…

Comment by Robin Hawke

Dear Robin,

I love how you conjured something different from the prompt, yet connected it at the end, just in case anyone was wondering. Very well done.

Aloha,

Doug

Comment by dmmacilroy

I was worried that the contemporary take wasn’t in keeping with the timelessness of the image. Then I shrugged my shoulders and wrote and that’s always the best solution to a writing problem.

Comment by Robin Hawke

This was by far the most unique take on the prompt. Very well-crafted! What struck me most were the words of a liar and picked bones on stone. Very evocative imagery of a mental state of rage and anguish.

Comment by Madison Woods

Thanks Madison. Great prompt this week.

Comment by Robin Hawke

This was a very contemporary take and one of my favorites. I love these lines…”And I read the words of a liar” and “picked bones on stone”. I guess I was struck the same as Madison!:)
But this was good. Very good.

Comment by Jeannie

Appreciate your praise. Thank you.

Comment by Robin Hawke

Mm. I like this, Robin. I think you’ve really played with words here in a way that forces us to slow down and pay attention to what’s being said by way of metaphor.

Excellent, as usual!

Comment by The Lime

I hear metaphors and similes and all those good things are out of favor, but I’m still into them. Happy you noticed the y,o,u.

Comment by Robin Hawke




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