Robin Hawke


Bat Call
March 8, 2012, 5:59 PM
Filed under: Three Sentence Stories

Bruce’s wealth initiated his exile from community. His way back in: his choices of fighting crime, of helping fellow man, of being there in the nick of time, of hero status—these ousted him among have nots. His technological ingenuity, the mask, and the cape divorced him from other haves.

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or is it vice versa?

Forgive me for this story everyone! My thoughts are with a main character in exile…

Comment by Robin Hawke

And the vice versa version?

Comment by Claire 'Word by Word'

His way back in: his choices of fighting crime, of helping fellow man, of being there in the nick of time, of hero status—these ousted him among the haves. His technological ingenuity, the mask, and the cape divorced him from other have nots.

This was a see saw concept for me: I know one is more true than the other, but everytime I shifted weight, I reconsidered. What a lousy day writing three sentences!

Comment by Robin Hawke

What makes this work for me is that the ‘haves’ and the ‘have nots’ are not as easy to characterize as one would think.
Perhaps put this away for a bit, then look at it with fresh eyes and it might become clearer in an edit?
I think it’s worth taking another shot at it, because I like the contrast between Bruce Wayne and his isolation.

Comment by Kirsten

Appreciate the advice–I’ll let it simmer. Any resolution will bubble up in another, maybe better, story.

Comment by Robin Hawke




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